Peer Review of Fergie's Summary

1.What do you like best about your peer's summary? (Why? How might he or she do more of it?)
After reading Fergie’s summary, I preferd the last part she wrote. It clearly described the story. She might can simplify the sentences.

2. Is it clear what is being summarized? (i.e. Did your peer list the source, and cite it correctly?)
It is clear being summarized. I think that some part of the summary is too specific.

3. Is the thesis of the original essay clear in the summary? (If not, write out what you think that thesis is.)
It is clear in the summary. I can know what the story happened from Fergie’s summary.

4. If you have read the original source, did you identify the same thesis? (If not, how does it differ?)
Yes, I identified the same thesis from Fergie’s summary.

5. Did your peer miss any key points from his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)I think that Fergie didn’t point out that the young became a successful businessman.

6. Did your peer include any of his own opinions in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)
In Fergie’s summary, I didn’t read about her on opinions.

7. Did your peer include any unimportant details in his or her summary? (If so, what are they?)
It’s not necessary to point out that the father called the man into his private study. It just needs to summarize the father gave son a bible.

8. Were any points in the summary lost? (If so, where and how might it be fixed? Why do you think it might be important?)
“The young man was angry and stormed out of the house, he never come back home until his father passed away.” This sentiece can be fiexed.
I will fix it into “ The young man stormed out of the house. After years, becoming a successful businessman, the man received the news of his father’s death.”
I think fixed it into that can point out what happened in the time of the man’s leaving.

Summary of a Full Box of Kisses

Summary of a Full Box of Kisses
A man punished hid daughter for wasting a toll of gold wrapping paper. The girl still brought the gift to her father. When her father opened the box was empty, he was get angry again. The girl tearfully told Father that the she blew kisses into box. The father was crushed and begged for girl’s forgiveness. The man kept the box for years. When he was discouraged, he took out an imaginary kiss and remembered the child’s love. He realized that there is no more precious possession than that.

Summary of a Full Box of Kisses

Summary of a Full Box of Kisses
A man punished hid daughter for wasting a toll of gold wrapping paper. The girl still brought the gift to her father. When her father opened the box was empty, he was get angry again. The girl tearfully told Father that the she blew kisses into box. The father was crushed and begged for girl’s forgiveness. The man kept the box for years. When he was discouraged, he took out an imaginary kiss and remembered the child’s love. He realized that there is no more precious possession than that.

Summary of the Graduation Present

Summary of the Graduation Present
A young man was getting ready to graduate from college. His dream graduation present is a sports car. On Graduation Day, his father gave him a leather-bound Bible. The young man was very disappointed and angry to leave home without the Bible. Leaving home without contact for many years, the young man had a very successful career. When he contacted with family, he got the news which his father had died. When he back home and opened to read the Bible, a care key fell from the Bible. The key was to the sports car which he wanted.