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A Friend with a glamorous life
Benny is a third grade student, majoring in Mass Communication and minoring in France in Tamkang University. We knew each other by my friend. He comes from Chung-Hua County. There are six people in his family, including his parents, three younger sisters, and him.
Benny is the vice-chief of Goodwill Ambassador of Tamkang University and he also joins the Mass Communication Student Organization. He had been served as the manager of administration section and teaching section in Goodwill Ambassador and the manager of administration section in Mass Communication. He likes swimming and traveling in the free time. He is very busy in his university life; therefore, he does not like waste time and always do the tings to the best. When he contacted the Goodwill Ambassador at the first time, he assumes that it communicates with other universities. In fact, the job of goodwill ambassador receives the guests from everywhere. Moreover, in the training course, he learned a great deal of lessons about convenances and deportment. Because of joining a lot of extracurricular activities, he meets many people with different ages from everywhere. For instance, he was on behalf of the school to visit the sister schools in Japan in this October. He interests in journalism, marketing, and public relations so he wants to work on the relative fields, which he interests such as a reporter or a chief public relation officer.
During the interview, I regards that Benny is amiable and responsibility. He does right things in the right time. He can aim to balance between classwork and extracurricular activities. Although he does not have much personal time, everything he copes with is also learning and discipline. Because of that, he can learn how to management his time well and expand his own life circle. He has a large number of experiences about how to lead a group and receive people. If he works as a chief public relation officer in the future, I think that he certainly can have an excellent performance.
In conclusion, I am very glad that Benny can share about his abundant experiences with me. I also admire that he can have such a splendid life. He encourages me that I need to figure out what I really want and achieve for.
Benny is a third grade student, majoring in Mass Communication and minoring in France in Tamkang University. We knew each other by my friend. He comes from Chung-Hua County. There are six people in his family, including his parents, three younger sisters, and him.
Benny is the vice-chief of Goodwill Ambassador of Tamkang University and he also joins the Mass Communication Student Organization. He had been served as the manager of administration section and teaching section in Goodwill Ambassador and the manager of administration section in Mass Communication. He likes swimming and traveling in the free time. He is very busy in his university life; therefore, he does not like waste time and always do the tings to the best. When he contacted the Goodwill Ambassador at the first time, he assumes that it communicates with other universities. In fact, the job of goodwill ambassador receives the guests from everywhere. Moreover, in the training course, he learned a great deal of lessons about convenances and deportment. Because of joining a lot of extracurricular activities, he meets many people with different ages from everywhere. For instance, he was on behalf of the school to visit the sister schools in Japan in this October. He interests in journalism, marketing, and public relations so he wants to work on the relative fields, which he interests such as a reporter or a chief public relation officer.
During the interview, I regards that Benny is amiable and responsibility. He does right things in the right time. He can aim to balance between classwork and extracurricular activities. Although he does not have much personal time, everything he copes with is also learning and discipline. Because of that, he can learn how to management his time well and expand his own life circle. He has a large number of experiences about how to lead a group and receive people. If he works as a chief public relation officer in the future, I think that he certainly can have an excellent performance.
In conclusion, I am very glad that Benny can share about his abundant experiences with me. I also admire that he can have such a splendid life. He encourages me that I need to figure out what I really want and achieve for.
posted by Stacy Chiu at 9:32 AM
4 Comments:
I think your organization is good, just be careful you have some typing wrong spelling. I'm not sure does "public relation" is right or wrong. maybe is "public relationship"...just you need check up. that's it. your grammar I think is really well.
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First of all, he does not "like waste" time and ..........is a grammatical error and should be corrected to " like to waste" or "like wasting". Next, "He interests in "journalism, marketing,.........Not people interest something but something interests you. Thus, you have to correct to 1. I have an interest in something. 2. Something interests me. 3. I am interested in something. By the way, I am really diligent to see your draft and give you comments.
Of course, we are graduated from same cram school. Your grammar is well, but i'm not~ Your article is really long. I feel tired after I read it. ha~ but you got a really good job, just revise some typing error. Then that's perfect.
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